Rate & comment my poem plz. 1-10, 10 being the best?

A girl with hidden regrets and lost with out her love


wakes up with tears in her bright blue eyes.


Recollection of the past few weeks races through her mind.


Rest is what she needs to calm her thoughts,


though as hard as she tries,


sleep will not overcome her again.


She picks up her shoes and softly walks to the front door.


Her shoes go on,


and she races out of the building filled with memories so deep.


Tears fill her eyes again as she faces the darkened skies.


If only she could fly away into those dark blue skies,


and leave all the regrets she has felt so long


below the surface of the earth to rot for eternity.


Oh, the sweet dark skies...


her only escape from her horrid life is on nights like these.


She feels the warm summer breeze brush against her cheeks,


drying the painful tears away.


The peaceful darkened skies


of never ending past,


they would never hurt her or cover her with scars.


The deep darkened night skies,


are all she has left to rely on...


to be there always for her to cry to.


The darkened skies will always return to dry her cold harsh tears.

Rate %26amp; comment my poem plz. 1-10, 10 being the best?
Honestly?





About a 3.





It sounds like a third-person account from a livejournal with random line breaks inserted. The lines are way long and prosaic. You simply tell the reader everything, instead of using your words (very few of which are actually poetic) and the line breaks and the rhythm to both tell AND imply the meaning. The angst-ridden teenager schtick is WAY overdone, as well.
Reply:i would say 8


dont use so much actions likes putting on shoes, makes me feel like im reading a book,





but i enjoyed it,
Reply:Since it's you who should be your own critic and the poem should satisfy you and not be judged on how much it is worth by someone else, I don't want to give it a number. But I do think it has some powerful emotions, I do wish you would add a little about the cause of her pain in more of a way to picture that aspect of it in addition to the pictures of her pain itself.
Reply:quiet a sad poem! :(





I would rate it 9 outta 10!


It could have been a little easier to read if you could have made paragraphs.


But the content is very nice! and if you have written it I have a few lines for you.





Tears are what I cherish the most,


I don`t let them fall, like the morning dew.


sacred they are, and not for everyone


smile is the one thing which i can freely distribute.


Tears come at a price, which is why I cherish them the most.
Reply:That is good. I give it a 10. I think alot of us girls can relate to this one!
Reply:About a 6.5.
Reply:wow that's a nice poem did u copy it?



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